| 2019-01-28 02:53:08 |
What a Difference a Summer Makes- Part 1
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Very well thought out story line, and very plausible as to believability. Having spent considerable time in southern France as well as in the area where Chad’s grandmother lives I know the area to be somewhat touristy. Chad would have to speak serviceable French to get by meeting women. Bianca being from South Africa speaks English. I suggest if possible arrange for Chad to take language lessons. A very nice piece of writing. |
| 2019-01-28 03:38:12 |
What a Difference a Summer Makes- Part 2
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Really great plot. Some of the advise your readers are sharing in the comments is spot on. Use your wonderful talent to continue constructing the characters. You have a great opportunity to expand on the drama when Chad hooks up with his two friends in Florida. Build on the characters. The sex scenes are great but keep them real. The story should hold our interest based in its own merit and not just sex scenes. You are good at creating suspense. Keep it up. |
| 2019-01-29 02:41:44 |
The Rocker Part 4_(6)
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What I love about your work is the fact you take the time to really FLESH out your characters. You offer hot sex scenes, however the story line is so clever, you actually have the reader peeking ahead to see what happens next. The plot is so well done it alone carries the story. Excellent and rewarding read! |
| 2019-01-29 02:52:34 |
The Chauffeur(#4)......Tina and Those Crazy Clients
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Señor Pablo, you have a devious and diabolical mind as evidenced with all the twists and turns this chapter takes. You have charged your characters with super energy to support their supercharged libidos! You are very clever in that you have the reader addicted so we have no choice except breathlessly race to the next chapter. Excellent body of work. BRAVO! |
| 2019-01-29 03:03:42 |
The Pissing Corduroy Orgy part 2
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I am really trying my best to get my brain around the corduroy trouser fetish? Maybe it is a male preference. Please, anyone. Help me out here. I have engaged in numerous types of piss play, Golden Showers, etc. And even published stories and written and posted articles online on this subject. I just don’t understand where the PLEASURE is derived from the action depicted in the first two chapters of this story. I did give it a positive review, only because I wish to establish a dialogue with the writer. |