| 2012-10-21 05:20:13 |
Broken Birds, Part 1, Beth's Agony
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Fuck God and his queer angels - Vengeance is mine said the SEAL. Absolutely brilliant start (Shocking but brilliantly written) I must see the rest. Thank you Deneb. Positive vote (Personal 10/10) |
| 2012-10-21 22:57:56 |
The day it happend
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Have a read of some of the other stories - they show how a story SHOULD be laid out, (ie Paragraphs) If you submit as a solid block of text, you've lost your readers immediately even if the story is good. Of course, in your case, the story will still be shit because that appears to be your style. Is English your first language ??? |
| 2012-10-23 17:35:42 |
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One of the best stories you have written. Like one of the other commenters, I do not like rape and abuse stories . . . but this was just excellent. Thank you. Positive Vote |
| 2012-10-24 00:29:23 |
Raping my father's wife Chapter 1
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Solid block of text, so I stopped there. I am curious as to what chemical deficiency you are suffering from, that you would fantasize about raping ANYBODY . . . . .See a shrink - you are seriously fucked in the head. NEGATIVE VOTE |
| 2012-10-24 00:42:01 |
The Phantom Stallion
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Beautifully written, but far too classy for most of the sex mad cretins (like ME) that infest this site. Positive Vote |