| 2011-03-02 15:11:46 |
Hijabi Slut Anam_(0)
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Its not really my bag it's interesting... You repeat yourself a lot, or at least noticeably watch that, drag your story out longer, and what is this leading up to? |
| 2011-03-03 00:04:56 |
Will's new home: Part 5
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You may want to format it in a txt format before you copy and paste it, and yes work on the spelling but all and all keep on plugging we can't all be perfect but constructive criticism helps... While your at it check out my stories and maybe that will help with some of your spelling issues. |
| 2011-03-05 18:53:16 |
Julie was a beautiful girl
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Spread your story out more it gets hard to read with the close paragraphs... |
| 2011-03-16 04:05:02 |
Cybergasm.
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Very cyberpunk, needing a story... |
| 2011-04-10 16:06:20 |
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I don't know I guess I wanted more of a setup.... Why rather than the what? |