| 2011-07-22 21:48:39 |
MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 2 DINNER
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formatting is better... now work on proof reading ... |
| 2011-08-15 19:21:43 |
Tera's Horse Ride!
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Space out your paragraphs for easy reading... Other than that I have no complaints... |
| 2011-10-01 15:40:33 |
Mom's Kids 2
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Excellent there were a few little annoying repatitions that I noted but all in all it added to the story's flavor... Good stuff... keep up the good work |
| 2011-10-21 00:13:09 |
Taking Mom Down to the Woods
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Nice story... you could have left the revelation for later... for when mom truely opens up as to the reason for her "Daddy" lust.... But other than that good stuff. |
| 2011-11-27 16:30:17 |
camping with mom Part IV
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Needs editing... please? I promise I read it again if you edit it. whatever you did it came out badly |