| 2013-08-12 10:16:24 |
New Roommate 6_(1)
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For a newbe this isn't too bad. Your spelling and word useage makes me wonder if you are required to go to school in the UK ?? Try slowing down and get a complete idea of what you want to say, going forward before putting it on paper. The ending is VERY important to youre story so think about how to end it , or continue it on another chapter. Maybe you could consider a Proof Reader. GOOD LUCK (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-08-12 13:37:12 |
When Toni Cums
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OMG !! I'm on fire. Loved every word of your story so far. Wasn't long enough but it did the trick. I hope her father doesn't come barging thru the door, you did realize cops carry guns, didn't you ?? I can't wait for the next chapter, and please don't leave her dumped and PG.!! Thanks !! WAITING !! (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-08-13 14:04:11 |
Molly's Good Fuck
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What a well done and well written story. I do wonder just how much of it was real and true experience of the writer ?? It rings so true of actual happening that I feel I know the answer. I would give anything to be a fly on your wall for the next several years. You will do well as a writer. Good Luck !! (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-08-15 11:12:06 |
Sisters By The Pool Part 8
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Hot time in that room. Your a fine writer and I sure hope you continue on with this threesum !! Good Luck ! (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-08-17 10:05:02 |
Mom Caught Me pt. 3
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Great, extra special hot. Wish I had been there !! Now you need to find one of Jeffs super stud buddies at school to join the party for a foursum. LOL Keep up the fine writing ! (countrycadillac) |