| 2015-12-30 04:09:15 |
Sister's drunken party
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Two felonies, two counts of rape. That's how the law sees it, besides the one count of sex with your sister. Nasty little cunt aren't you? |
| 2016-02-05 14:43:17 |
The Maintenance Man another repair 6
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Having read through both the Maintenance Man series, more or less in a marathon read-a-fest, I was disappointed by the immature tenor of the writing. I hate making this criticism, but for an established writer to be producing what is very juvenile storytelling is saddening. Pars001, you need to rework your imagery, to see things as an adult, not a 15 yo boy. In some of your other series you show an adult tone; why this juvenile one here? Things have to be believable, and going without sleep for 5 or 6 days and being alert and productive is not. Sure, this science fiction, and maybe the "hero" is a mini superman, but going without the fundamentals of life are impossible; sleep, eating are necessary human attributes, and much as some would like to live on pills and no sleep, it just don't fit. Get real, please. |
| 2016-02-11 12:22:36 |
My boyfriend likes to expose me Part 27
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Nice little story Vanessa; much more enjoyable than the Chinese visit. Just one thing, since the inner labia are attached to the underside of the glans of the clitoris, how does the clitoral ring get fitted? Or hadn't you thought about that? I can imagine Lizzy and the twins hitting it off well, so perhaps we may have a chapter with them together, what do you think? |
| 2016-03-09 12:50:39 |
Eternal Darkness: Chapter Five_(0)
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Once Forgotten, all of Eternal DARKNESS is there on Watt Pad, Eternal Destiny is only part there, I have been sitting waiting for Chapter 7 for a while; wondering if I will ever see it. I must add that I think the whole series is brilliant up to now, and I really think that with careful editing it should be published in several books, one for each theme. |
| 2016-03-09 14:20:52 |
Eternal Darkness: Chapter Five_(0)
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OnceForgotten, I now remember that one of the chapters on the Watt Pad site is incomplete - I guess about half the chapter going on the page-top tracer - unfortunately I forget which chapter. Sorry. |