| 2019-02-08 22:13:14 |
My Naughty Aunt May_(0)
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When I began reading this rather unusual tale, I thought the story line to be somewhat far fetched or at the least not plausible. However as I continued with the story, I realized it totally is. I do not have a Aunt May but I have a Tia Adriana (aunt Adriana). The only difference I was sent by my mother to live with her for a couple of years while going to university. The other difference is I am a girl. Thanks for the sharing the story and bringing back fond memories of my Aunt Adriana. |
| 2019-02-08 22:19:46 |
Brother Sister Mother Neightbor Part 1
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Something about the story bothered me, so I went back and read it a second time, and then a third time. I have never read a story on this site three times! Finally I realized what was disturbing as regards the flow of the story. You need to change the mom character, (June) to aunt June. The sex between the teens is plausible, but not with the mom as described. In real life I know of at least two moms who had sex with their 19 year old son, however none occurred as you describe in this story. Do not be offended I enjoyed the story and you are very talented. Thanks for sharing. I do suggest you do spell check, as the misspelled words are a little distracting. I look forward to enjoying your other compositions. |
| 2019-02-09 00:56:20 |
The Chauffeur (#19) Diane and a Baby
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This is a story about inmortals. The characters never need to sleep, they all have 27 orgasms every day. Oh Pablo, you mixed the name of James for John in the solo scene between Diane and David. |
| 2019-02-09 02:11:19 |
The Chauffeur (#20) The Return of Jill
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Thus ends the best chapter yet. One of the things that makes this chapter superior is most of the plot was story driven rather than nonstop sex scene driven. Not that I am saying anything negative about the sex scenes. As a female reader as well as a fellow author I am attracted to a narrative that boasts a little drama and suspense. On the technical side, Continental Airlines merged with United some years ago. Also as one who is quite familiar with the Swinger Life Style, it is in utter poor etiquette for the male to move his manhood from the anal cavern of one woman and insert it directly into the vagina of another without some serious cleaning. Just Saying! Excellent read. Thanks |
| 2019-02-09 03:42:23 |
The Chauffeur (#21) Games.
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Pablo you must be the most prolific author on this site. I really enjoy the chapters that have a real story playing and not just juicy sex scenes. I loved the fact that in this chapter David finally did some work to justify his lifestyle and pay. Keep up the effort to entertain your readers. Don’t sweat the trolls. They are just jealous want to be writers with no talent or skill. I think I will try and post some of my scribbling here, just to show off to you guys. |