| 2013-08-31 13:41:30 |
Milf milf milf
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TRUE LOL Your so full of BS. Grow up and act your age (sounds like about nine ! |
| 2013-09-01 09:42:47 |
For you incest lovers.
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I don't intend to discourage you BUT I would suggest you spend some time reading several of the very high rated (96+%) stories to get a better idea of what makes a good sexual tale. You need to slow down, think ahead, increase your DETAILS a lot more and when your done writing read what you have done and improve on it if needed. Keep at it and you could be a succesful writer. (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-09-01 10:07:30 |
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Very pleasent to read, but I sure wish it had continued on another chapter or two. Your a good writer, keep it up (LOL), the writing that is. (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-09-01 11:46:09 |
Catness at the Pool Party
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What a total mess !! Words running into each other, No spacing, no sense at all !! Wait till High School, maybe they will teach you how to write, cause you sure don't have a clue. (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-09-01 12:10:15 |
I'm hot for my older sister
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NOW this is how a story should be written !!! Besides a super story line the action descriptions were top notch and the form was wonderful. I'm going to check your profile for any other stories you have. Keep up the great writing ! (countrycadillac) |