| 2016-12-23 13:01:07 |
Cousin Jenna
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So hard to read, what's the point? Is Jenna some godess? Why the fixation? Your rather juvenile writing style tends to say "Move on buddy, get a life". |
| 2016-12-23 12:42:39 |
The Writer: Part 1
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Do we really need the business of sperm splattering face and hair in volcanic profusion? It was a blow job, remember? and most serious blowjobs are swallow jobs too. Why turn a good story into a technicolor production of cum? If the storyline is good enough, the sloppy bits are superfluous. Of course, the fags love the slurp and slap of a good fuck, rather than the happy feelings of the participants; drooling over the "tightness", the "clasping", the "moans", the "flailing legs", ad nauseum. |
| 2016-12-30 23:34:14 |
THE WAGES OF SIN--Part 3
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Another fine story; you somehow manage variety and characters so well, and as a result produce very readable stories with that touch of life and reality. Well done, sir!! |
| 2016-12-23 10:43:56 |
Santa IV
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And a Merry Christmas to you Pars, I value your stories like no others, always interesting and unique. Enjoy you Christmas, and have a Happy New Year. All the best from pyroclast. |
| 2016-06-02 09:20:42 |
Lost Empire 23
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Pars, I have to agree with Retired NCO, magnificent story. And I too have to admit I search every day for the next chapter! Yes it can be frustration +++! Keep the story flowing; and think about getting it proofread and published as a book. Cheers. |